Poem: Fifth of May?
Fifth of May I started out to see the world, It was the fifth of May. I wondered if I'd see it all, And do it in a day. I took a walk along the shore, The sea was to my right. The smell and sound filled up my head, Enhancing such a sight. The waves were crashing on the shore, A sound like dynamite. Water droplets flying by, Like tiny birds in flight The spray was flying in the air, Unfurling as a sail. Shooting to the left and right, Just like a serpent's tail. As I walked on the great sea calmed, I found a tiny beach. It seemed a long way down to it, T'was almost out of reach. But down I climbed, and stood alone, Upon the packed wet sand. And marvelled at the workmanship, Of Mother Nature's hand. Then I sat down upon the sand, My toes were in the sea. I scratched my name upon the beach, For all the world to see. I wondered if I was the first, To reach this lovely spot. The only asnwer that I found, Said, "Oh, I reacon not". Contiued due to space constraints: As I got up to go again, Upon my lonely lark. A wave then washed my name away, And left there narry mark. As I climbed up I turned around, Would I come back this way? To see this little strip of sand. I found this fifth of May. This one, I wrote in about 10 minutes. It wouldn't ave taken so long if I could type faster. I just saw the scene in my mind like a movie in fast forward, and since I was on break at the time, I typed it. I hope it brings at least a little ray of sunshine to someone. And I hate the H key on this Dell Laptop. Gotta bang it to get it to work.
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1 :
I really like it. It has such imagery and makes me feel like I am there on that beach.
2 :
It was the fifth of May And I thought I might be gay So I kissed a guy And he said with a sigh What the heck is wrong with you?
3 :
Remember remember, the 5th of November, the gunpowder treasoning... huh? oh yeah this is supposed to be 5th of may. I'll go V somewhere else SJ
4 :
I think it's beautiful!...great work
5 :
Dondi, I really like this. You have a smooth sense of rhyme and meter. I wish I could do what you seem to do effortlessly (though I'm sure there was a lot of work behind building the skill). I wanted to point out two things (and I know this borders on one of your pet peeves from an earlier quesiton of yours, so my only point in saying it is to fix minor nits). Reacon should be reckon Narry I think should be ne'er a. Really nice poem Dondi. Best, Todd
6 :
not too bad but i don't care much for poetry.
7 :
that one brings be back in time , to when one was empty and glad to sit and watch i felt the vibe of the poem and it lifted my spirit , its a good poem , i always feel that once a poem is written the first time it should never be written , because the more u rewrite it the more plastic it turns ,
Title : Poem: Fifth of May
Description : Poem: Fifth of May? Fifth of May I started out to see the world, It was the fifth of May. I wondered if I'd see it all, And do it in a d...