What do you think of my poem about seasons? can some one please edit it : )?
Never Ending Circle The ice is like glass shimmering on the ground, Snowflakes of crystals falling with no sound, The flowers bloom with bright colours and flair, Birds start singing beautiful tunes to share, The warm sun comes out from beneath the clouds, Its great at the beach if you don’t mind the crowds, The trees shed their leaves, such a wonderful sight, It won’t be long until the birds take flight, Seasons come and go like people through a door, It’ll all start again like many times before. yeah it does that was just when i copied it sorry im in year 10 (14 years old) but i suck at english my dad helped me a little bit
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I don't know your age but it sounds very good to me! Very good indeed. No spelling errors either though make sure the 6th line ends at 'crowds' and 'The trees' start on a new line. Otherwise, really REALLY good.
2 :
I think that your poem is beautiful-it really takes you thru the seasons.
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Ice like glass shimmering the ground Snowflakes of crystal falling. No sound The winds are blowing the ice queens breath Flurry of winter on the moon's crest The ballet of snow drifting into place Correlates with the bells on the old wooden sleigh Cries of the new born echo the land Bees searching for love on demand making honeycomb love for all to taste while gleaming rush the waterfalls race Songs of spring living everywhere Bringing their life song to the air Flowers blooming bright colors flair Birds awake singing beauty into the air The yellow sun dawns from beneath the clouds Warming the beach for the lightly clad crowds Summer burns the earth with sizzling symphony Suntans and sweat trace the dancing epiphany The trees turn shades of red and gold Then shed their leaves exposing branches barren and bold The air is crisp with expectancy and restless rain Frost brushes the corners of window pane Whirling and stirring the autumn's pompous show Onward and forward with blustery blow The only reason I changed it at all is a season was left out. This is a beautiful poem honey. You are brilliant. You asked for it to be edited so I did but truly you had it going on anyway I do suggest though that these verses be in order of the seasons like Summer, spring, fall and winter side by side in the circle!
Title : What do you think of my poem about seasons? can some one please edit it : )
Description : What do you think of my poem about seasons? can some one please edit it : )? Never Ending Circle The ice is like glass shimmering on the g...